Where finding where

Posing this he went along
his dusty path and sat.
Nowhere could his baby rest.

Nor could he kick up a name
for his new brother, his papoose
sagging in the rough.

Even wolves struck noseless
walked steady fourfooted
in the dragging path.

Behind them bears. Behind them
a mother pallid this morning
searching carefully, noiselessly.

___________

Wondering about the passivity in this piece. Shed off my disdain of passivity, now less tightly gripping. Also, unsure how noticeable the temporal shift in the final strophe is.

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~ by Jeremy on April 14, 2010.

4 Responses to “Where finding where”

  1. This poem is crazy!…comon Man…Nice one.

  2. oh what a wicked cool poem…all journeying together to get where…

  3. Wow- what a picture you paint with words

  4. I sense a trick at work.

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